"Still More" (Yamaguchirow K/K)
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wombat1138This story takes up most of the doujinshi "Saikai", printed in 2000; there are various short minicomics and other extras scattered around it, but I don't have any plans for those so far. According to the teeny page numbers nearly buried in the spine, "Still More" runs from pages 10-36.
Current progress: done(ish).
(Hmm. Weirdly, I seem to've shifted over to finding hi-res scans *easier* to work with than paper copies, esp. for tracking the aforementioned "refinements"... downloaded a scan set of "Saikai", but for really teeny blobs of kanji, the paper copy is the only way to go, and I really do need the handwriting practice.)
Meanwhile, I've found a scan set for the original "Hama" (Yamaguchirow's first IY/Kagome doujin), but most of the pages are only ~50kb and I may not be able to read them (esp. the handwritten bits).
Usual disclaimers: I don't really know what I'm doing, and don't want this turned into English-language scanslations. I noticed a few weeks ago that one member of lemonscented_rk is trying to sell raw RK doujinshi scans from her own blog, which is making me seriously ponder friends-locking all of these translations :b
For usual format key, check previous translations.
#9#
Splash page; title/credits in romaji.
#10#
Kaoru puts a four-tiered food box onto the table: ~kapa*~ (clunk)
Her:
= yo--shi 'tto!!
- yoshi: a supportive/jubilant exclamation
- 'tto: exaggerated form of the particle "to"
-- "...and woohoo! Yay me!"
+++
= kya--n dekita dekita--*
- dekita <- past tense of "dekiru" (able to do something)
-- "Squeee-- I did it, I really did it!"
= [Kamiya Kasshin Ryuu] osechi-[yondan] o-[Shougatsu] supesharuu!
- osechi: traditional foods for New Year's Day
- [yondan]: four layers
- supesharu: loanword from English "special"? loanwords are normally written in katakana, but this is in hiragana...
-- "Kamiya Kasshin Ryuu special New Year's four-tray feast!"
~ji--n~ (overjoyed)
[Don't eat that, Kenshin-- remember Kyouken 5.1? Well, I guess he wouldn't, since that was actually written after Saikai...]
+++
She hugs the food box lovingly: ~hishi*~
= [Kenshin]-ga [rusuchuu]-no kono-[suushuukan]...
= [N][S] during-absence[noun] these-several-weeks
= [Tae]-san-no-[tokoro]-ni [kayo]i[zu]mete [tokkun] shite-[mora]tta [seika]-ga [ima]! koko-ni!!
- [tokoro]: "place"; seems to be a more more common pronunciation of this kanji than [toko]
= to-[N]+'s-place frequently-visiting special-training did-for-me results[S] now! in-here!!
= ([kekkyoku] [hanbun-igai]-[ue] [Tae]-san-ga [tsuku]tta yo--na-mon' da-kedo)
= after-all more-than-about-half [N]+[S] prepared as-if-thing is[C] however
-- "While Kenshin's been away for the past few weeks, I've been frequently visiting Tae-san's place so she could give me special cooking lessons, and this is the result now! In this box!"
-- "(even though in the end, Tae-san was the one who actually prepared more than half of this)"
+++
She softly thumps her chin down onto the box lid: ~hata!~
= ...HONTO-ni [kyou] [kae]tte-kuru wa-yo ne...
- [kyou}: "today"; more informal pronunciation than [konnichi] for the same kanji pair
= really today coming-back-home [mM] [P]
-- "He really is coming home again today, I hope..."
+++
= [nennai]-ni-wa [kae]ru 'tte [i]tte'ta mon' ne...
= within-the-year[T] return-home ["] was-saying thing [P]
-- "'I'll come back before the end of the year'-- that's what he kept telling me, right?"
= [kyou]-wa [oo-miso](ootsugomori) nan da shi...
- [oo-miso]: (kanji) New Year
- oo-tsugomori: (furigana) last day of the year
- shi: a conjunction for adding clauses (vs. individual words)
= today[T] New-Year('s eve) what [C] and
-- "And now that it's New Year's Eve..."
#11#
heavy door rattling in its tracks: ~GATA GATA~
She sighs/yawns: ~ha--*~
+++
= ha... | [atashi] 'ttara [nani] [kitai]-shite'ru n'darou...
- 'ttara <- to-ittara <- "when/then" conditional of [i]u (speak, say)
= [sigh] | I [mM] what is-hoping/expecting [fM]probably-is[C]
= [betsu]-ni [oo-miso]-ga... [kotoshi] [kagi]ri 'tte WAKE-mo nai no-ni...
- betsu-ni: (with negative verb) particularly (via double negative from "not different"?)
- particularly New-Year[S]... this-year up-to ["/mM?] also-REASON not[iX] although
[Slightly remixing both lines]
= "(sigh) | That really is my wish for the New Year... | ...even if he can't come home by this year's end..."
+++
= [Kenshin]-ga [buji]-ni [kae]tte-kite-kuretara...
= [N][S] safely when-coming-home-for-me
-- "As long as Kenshin comes back safely to me..."
= sore-de ii ga ja-nai...
-- "nothing else really matters..."
+++
= ...o[furo] [sa]mechatta ka mo
- [sa]meru: become cold
-- "I suppose the bath is completely cold by now."
= [oida]ki shi to kou kara
= reheating-bath and/doing? this-way from
-- "So I'd better go reheat it."
#12#
The bath is inside, but the fireplace underneath it is built into the outside wall of the building.
She pokes the fire: ~PACHI PACHI~ (crackle crackle)
= ...demo | yappari [haya]ku [kae]tte-kite [ho]shii...
= but | as-expected quickly coming-home desireable
[Remix]
-- "...but I still wish | that he'd come home quickly, as I'd expected."
+++
= a... DAME DAME | konna n'ja ii [oku]-san ni-narenai zo!!
- [oku]: literally "inside/inmost"; with the added personal honorific -san, a term for "wife"
- narenai <-? neg. of nareru <- potential of naru (become): can't become?
= [X] [negatives] | this-way [P] good wife can't-become [mM]
-- "No, I shouldn't... | I can't become a good wife if I think that way!!"
She goes back inside, rattling the door shut again: ~KARA*~
And he's already inside, starting to unwrap a cloak or other overgarment.
#13#
She yeeps with surprised delight, or delighted surprise: wa--*
Him:
= sonna-[fuu]-ni [odoro]kanakute mo...
- [odoro]kanakute <- -te form of [odoro]kanai <- neg. of [odoro]ku (be surprised/frightened): "not surprised/frightened"
[The -nakute-mo construction seems to be a sort of nonrestrictive indication, chopped down from longer phrases such as "-nakute mo ii" ("it's okay if you don't [verb], but you can if you want to"). Supposedly the -te forms aren't supposed to be sentence-final, and if they appear to be, should have a verb or copula reconstructed afterward: "-te kudasai" ("please [verb]"; "-nakute mo ii desu").]
= in-that-manner not-surprising also...
-- "You don't have to be *that* surprised..."
Her:
= datte datte datte
[Lots of slightly different meanings for "datte", even in its single(?) identity as a sort of compound particle thing. I think I'm undercaffeinated at the moment because my brain feels like sludge :b ]
= "But, I thought, because--"
+++
~daki*~ (glompage)
[Actually a grammatical verb form from "daku" (embrace) rather than pure onomatopoeia]
= o-kaeri-nasa--i! | otto
-- "Welcome home-- | husband!!"
Looks like they really are formally married now.
+++
Him:
= tadaima...
-- "I've come back home..."
= [rusuchu] [nanigoto]-mo-nakatta de-gozaru ka...?
- [nanigoto]: something; [nanigoto]-mo: anything/nothing (depending on pos/neg verb); [nanigoto]-mo-naku: peacefully
= during-absence nothing-happened [C] [Q]
[Flipping neg. syntax]
-- "Did everything go well while I was away...?"
+++
Her:
= (a) | un! [Kenshin] koso [kega] to-ka nai?
- koso: "indeed/precisely" etc.; emphasizes the previous clause/noun
- [kega]: injury
- to-ka: "stuff like", "such as" etc.; vaguer form of quotative/indicative particle "to"
-- "(ah) | Yes-- what about you, Kenshin? You didn't get hurt or anything like that, did you?"
Him:
= aa
[In Japanese, after a negative statement/question, an affirmative reply confirms the previous negative ("Yes, you're right, I didn't get hurt") unlike normal English usage which would refute the negative ("Yes, I did get hurt").]
-- "No, I'm fine."
#14#
Her:
= yokatta | anata-ga [buji]-de nani-yori
- [buji]: peace/safety (lit'ly ~"no stuff")
- nani-yori: "anything/nothing" (depending on verb polarity); lit'ly "than/from-what/which"
-- "That's good | I'm so glad that you're safe."
+++
Him:
= sono-[kao]-ga [mi]takatta | e...
- [mi]takatta <- past of [mi]tai <- desid. of {mi]ru (see): "wanted to see"
-- "That's the face I've been longing to see | yes..."
Keep that sentence in mind. He repeats it in a few pages.
+++
Smooching commences.
= n*
= n...
= *ha... ...n*
She clutches his sleeve: ~gyuu*~
= nn--*
#15#
Heavy breathing intensifies.
(top panel first:)
= nha* | HAA HAA...
= n* n... nmu*
+++
She sinks away from him:
= HAA | ...a [Ken]shiin...
~kakun~ (along her back: "wobble/tremble")
Him:
= oro | [chikara]-[nu]keta de-gozaru ka?
- [chikaranu]ke: disappointment, discouragement; however, no examples found with forms of "iru" immediately afterward.
- [chikara]-[nu]keru: disappoint, discourage
[I think he's indirectly apologizing for his late return; otherwise, if he were asking "Are you too tired to do anything right now?" I think the verb would be in the past tense-- and he seems perfectly willing to override complaints of fatigue later on.]
[Almost complete rephrase :b ]
-- "Oro | were you becoming very lonely without me?"
+++
= kore-wa?
-- "What's this?"
Her:
= a... osechi [tsuku]tta n'da kedo...
-- "Ah... it's some New Year's food that I prepared..."
Him:
= sore-wa sugoi!
-- "That's amazing!"
#16#
He moves the food box from the table to the floor: ~TO*~ (thump)
= jaa kore-wa [ashita]-no [tano]shimi [to]tte-oite...
- [to]tte-oite <- 'te form of [to]tte-oku (set aside, keep for later) <- [to]ru (take, lift, get)
-- "Well, let's set it aside for now and enjoy it tomorrow..."
+++
Kaoru gets to sit on the table instead.
Her:
= a* | ima]-wa kotchi-ga [ta]betai...
-- "Ah-- | But I want us to eat it here and now..."
+++
He tips her onto her back, slides a hand up her kimono, and spreads her legs: ~ba*~ (thump)
= cho* | [Kenshin]*
-- "Wait-- | Kenshin--"
+++
= u...so*
[See next lines]
~DOKI*~ (heartbeat)
+++
Hakama-removal speed record!
~guri guri*~ (preliminary rubbing against her)
= sonna... | [kyuu]-ni*...
- [kyuu]-na: quick, hasty (nounlike adjective)
-- "I can't believe... | you're doing this... | so quickly!"
#17#
~guri*~ (more rubbing; setting up for entry)
Small gasp from him: ...*
Larger one from her: a*
+++
Large thrusting motions: ~gugu~ ~guryi~
Small ~gyuu~ (tight fit)
= i* ya* SUGE--ni [i]recha... | aN... [ita]*
- suge--ni: from "sugoi" (amazing), or from "sugu ni" (immediately)? the latter makes more sense in this context...
- [i]recha <- [i]rete-wa <- [i]reru (insert/allow A into B as external agent)
-- "Don't-- plunge it in-- all at once... | ow... it hurts--"
+++
Him: (w/ continuing ~gu* gu* gu*~ and small panting breath "HAA...")
= daijoubu.. | jiki-ni...
- jiki-ni: immediately, directly
-- "It'll be fine... | in a moment..."
+++
= hora... [hai]tta...
- [hai]ru: enter, fit-into
-- "see... I'm all the way in now..."
Full pelvic impact: ~zuo~
Squishier thrusting: ~gunyu~ ~gunyu nyu~
+++
Definitely lubricating now: ~nuru*~
= a*
#18#
He presses her hand against the center of action: ~nuru--~
= ne... koko... | mou [nu]rete-kite'ru
-- "And... feel here... | you're starting to become very juicy"
Her:
= iya*... [i]wanaide*
-- "Yeep... please don't say that"
(or possibly "don't talk that way"?)
+++
Force vector and flow rate both increasing: ~ju* zupo*~
= a* | nn*
+++
= a* | dame*... n*... [kan]jite...-kitaa...
-- "Ah | No, don't... it's started... to feel..."
+++
Him: ~ZU* ZUPU*~
= sono-[kao]-mo... | [mi]takatta..
-- "I've been longing to see... | that face, too..."
[Line repeated from a few pages ago.]
#19# has sound effects all over the place, in roughly diagonal layers :b
More pumping near the top: ~ZUPU~ ~NUPU~
Kaoru: a*nFU | haaFU
Table rocking: ~GATA*~ ~GATA*~
Her again: yaa* a* | aa*
#20#
Panting afterward on the floor:
= HAA... | HAA
+++
Her:
= mou* [kae]tte-kuru-nari...
- nari: a form of the copula I've never seen before... how the heck is this used?
-- "Sheesh-- did it have to be the moment you came home...?"
Him:
= datte [shikata]-nai de-gozarou
-- "But I couldn't help it"
+++
= [Kaoru-dono]-no-[kao]-wo [mi]ru-to | tsui [ho]shiku-naru...
-- "As soon as I saw your face | I suddenly wanted you, right away..."
+++
Her:
= sore 'tte [atashi]-no-sei-ni shite'ru?
= that ["/mM] to-my-fault is-doing
-- "So you're saying it was my fault?"
Him:
= sou sou...
-- "That's right..."
#21#
Her:
= nee... | [Kenshin]... o[naka] [a]ite-nai no?
-- "Say... | Kenshin... aren't you hungry?"
Him:
= iya | sore-yori [furo]-ni [hae]ritai
-- "Not really | I'd rather go take a bath..."
+++
= [issho]-ni
-- "...together with you."
+++
Kamiya Fist o' Pain: ~bago--~
= iya
-- "No way!"
+++
= IYA IYA--*
-- "No, NO!!!"
= (datte [mae]-kara [kira]tte [i]tte'ru desho-- HAZUKASHII-kara damee--)
= [P] from-before disliking is-saying probably[C] from-embarrassing pointless
[The verb forms in the first clause are confusing me :b ]
-- "(Because I've always been telling you that I don't like to do that-- it's just too EMBARRASSING, I don't want to--)"
+++
He suddenly hoists her over his shoulder: ~hyoi~ (ambush)
= [kyou]-wa [kyoukou]
- [kyoukou]: enforcement
-- "Well, today, you'll have to!"
Her?:
= dozo--*
[??? Normally, "douzo" is used to mean "go ahead" or "come this way" etc., but the jagged balloon outline suggests that this is her line, and she doesn't look cooperative at all.]
-- "You're going to carry me off like *this*?!"
+++
= (a...n [koshi]-ni-[chikara]-ga [hai]ranai)
- [koshi]: hip, pelvis, loins; Google translates 腰に力 as "hip force", and 腰に力が入った as "came back to power"...? Dang idioms :b
[Argh-- I really need to remember that the kanji for that verb is almost always read as [hai]ru when used by itself, instead of in compounds.]
...I have to guess that she's complaining that her pelvic region is already feeling wobbly/painful from the table boink, but I really don't know how to express that. "Darn you-- now it hurts to stand up!"? "Don't put me back down-- my legs still feel like jelly and I can't walk by mmyself yet!"? Urg.
#22#
Big splash: ~zaba--*~
Tiny handwritten caption under panel, pointing toward Kaoru:
= [kekkyou] [nu]ga[?]nta
[Can't figure out that one kana toward the end-- possibilities include "mi", "mu", "zu", "o", "se"... "se" makes the most sense, as part of the verb [nu]gaseru (make someone undress), but I can't work out how the following syllables fit into any of these, and the last kana is definitely "ta" rather than "da".]
- [nu]gasu <- alternate form of [nu]gaseru?
Bleargh. I give up on trying to strictly parse this, since the general meaning is pretty clear from the kanji and context: "She finally took her clothes off" or slight variations such as "He finally persuaded her to take her clothes off" etc.
According to normal bath logistics, the splash was probably the rinse water from Kaoru pouring buckets of cold water over her body as she washed in the next room, rather than Kenshin doing a cannonball jump into the tub of hot water.
+++
Him:
= [kaze-hi]ku de-gozaru yo-- | (kotchi muite'ru kara)
-- "You're going to catch a cold-- | (so you should turn around and come over here)"
+++
She slides the wooden door shut to close off the tub room: ~GATAGATA~ (rattle/roll)
Her:
= mou... [kyou]-dake nan-dakara ne...
= [X]... only-today what-because [P]
-- "Oh, fine... but I'm only going to do this for today, okay?"
~chapo*~ (small splash as she dips her foot into the water)
#23#
He makes a grab for her arm and pulls her over:
~gui*~ (clutch)
~zaba~ (larger splash)
Her:
= aN
+++
Another ~zaba~ splash.
Her:
= ke* [Kenshin]... o-[yu]-ga*
-- "Ke-- Kenshin... but we're in the tub!"
Normally, nothing goes into the tub except for clean bodies. Extra fluids may well present some difficult logistics for tub cleanup afterward.
Him:
= ii kara...
-- "It's okay..."
+++
= chanto [kata]-made [?]katte
[The last kanji is the root of several verbs, none of which seems to fit the -katte suffix? [tsu]keru (dip in, self-soak?), [hita]su (soak/dip/drench something else?), [hita]ru (be soaked/drenched)? The variant *[tsu]kasu doesn't seem to exist, nor does the kanji seem to exist as a single freestanding noun, though it's pronounced [shin]- in various compounds.]
[Bah. I'm going to proceed as if the verb [tsu]kasu is real-- maybe it is, maybe it isn't.]
= neatly up-to-shoulder soaking
-- "Just settle into the water, up to your shoulders."
Her:
= a... un...
-- "Um... okay..."
+++
Underwater "splash" as he pulls her into his lap: ~chapon~
She is justifiably suspicious.
= --demo nanka sugo--ku H-na [taisei] de [hae]tte-nai?
- [taisei]: posture
-- "But aren't you arranging us into an amazingly naughty position?"
Him:
= kou shinai to [futari] [issho]-ni [hai]renu de-gozaru yo
- [hai]renu <- alt. for [hai]renai <- neg. of [hai]reru (can enter/hold)
= this-way not-do and two-people together can't-enter [C] [mM]
-- "Why not sit this way? Aren't we a married couple, after all?"
Her:
= so... sou?
-- "I... guess so."
#24#
Glomp: ~gyuu*~
Her:
= sou ieba [Yahiko]-wa?
-- "By the way, how is Yahiko?"
Him:
= [hara]-ga-[he]tta 'tte | [Aka]beko-ni [choukou] de-gozaru na
- [choukou]: nonstop
-- "He said he was really hungry, so he went directly to the Akabeko."
+++
Boobage-fondling: ~monya~
= [Tsubame]-chan-ga [mokukki]-mo kuse-ni (kusu)
-- "But it was because of Tsubame, too (chuckle)"
= [Yahiko]-mo [otoko] de-gozaru na
[By itself, [otoko] is more brusque/informal ("guy", "male") than the usual phrase [otoko]-no-hito for "man"]
-- "After all, Yahiko is a man too, isn't he..."
Her:
= aN KORA
-- "(gasp) Hey, stop that--"
+++
~GOOO...N~ (a isolated sound from a large bell)
someone:
= a
+++
~jaba*~ (splash as he stands up in the tub)
Her:
= [Joya]-no [kane] da wa...
-- "That's the New Year's bell..."
Him:
= mou sonna [jikan] de-gozaru ka
- [jikan]: time
-- "It is around that time, isn't it?"
#25#
Her:
= a*
~zaba*~ (splash)
+++
Her:
= aan iya* | yada* {Kenshin]*
-- "Hey, don't-- | Kenshin, stop it!"
[Yeah, I'll be interpolating a lot of the dialogue on this page.]
Him:
= iya?
-- "Stop what?"
Her:
= a...a...
+++
Her:
= soko-wa*
-- "Stop... touching me there--"
= a* m | haa
Suctiony sounds: ~chu chu kuchu~
[.daed si lauP]
+++
?:
= ii...n
[For some reason, I keep wanting to read this line as him saying, "But it feels good, doesn't it?" even though the balloon outlines suggest that it's her saying "It feels good."]
Her: ~pikun~ (tremor, near her face)
= aa*
Him: ~guchu guchu~ (finger suction from below)
= [kan]jiru? (sugoi [oto]-shite'ru)
-- "How does that feel? (You're making some amazing sounds.)"
+++
Her:
= datte... sakki shita pakari-de [binkan]-na no...
- pakari: opening?
- [binkan]-na: sensitive
= [P]... recently before from-opening sensitive [P]
-- "That's because... I'm still sensitive from being opened up a few minutes ago..."
Him: ~nuru~ (slippery fingers)
= koko-mo?
-- "Inside here, too?"
#26#
Some panting in small ovals over her shoulders: ~HAA~ ~HAA~
Her:
= iya* iyaan* | soko-mo* a* a...n*
-- "No, don't-- | not there, too... nh--
~hiku hiku~ (tremors, over her knees)
~kuri~ (finger-curling)
~gopu puju~ (wet plunging)
+++
~puchu puju~ (more of the same)
~pota pota~ (dripping underneath)
Her:
= a * | dame dame [de]chau*
- [de]chau <- [de]te-shimau <- [de]ru (exit, depart): "finally/regrettably exit" ; the -te form of [da]su (alt. pronunciation of the same kanji) would be [da]shite.
...this may be another piece of untranslatable wordplay, since the verb [de]ru is sometimes used for male orgasm. So she may be saying, "Take your fingers out of me already!", but she may also be saying, "Hurry up and ejaculate into me!" Or both at the same time.
The only "translation" I can think of requires completely ditching/reversing the literal words involved :b
-- "Ah-- | stop that, just put it into me now!"
+++
He stops, looking confused:
= e*
-- "...huh?"
Him:
= [Kenshin]-no... ARE...
[She's using a delicate euphemism for his bits; "are" (that thing) is a relative pronoun that's parallel to "sore" and "kore".]
-- "You know, your... thing."
He's still confused.
= ...nande?
-- "...what thing?"
+++
Her:
= datte... | [Kenshin]-no [aka]-chan [haya]ku [ho]shii n'da mon'
- [aka]-chan: baby (literally "cute little red thing/person")
-- "Um, you see... | I really want you to make me pregnant soon, and so..."
#27#
I don't think he's fully recharged yet, though:
= so... | sonna-[koto] nara...
-- "If... | if that's what you want right now, then..."
+++
Bell ringing again: ~GOO...N~
Glompage: ~gyugyu--~
?:
= [shimpai]-sezu to mo-ikura-demo...
- ikura: how much/many?
- ikura-demo: any amount, as much as you want
- mo ikura-demo: any amount more
-- "Don't worry, we can do it as many more times as you want..."
+++
Him?:
= HORA | motto [o]kiku]-shite...
-- "Here-- | make me larger..."
Her:
= un...
-- "Okay..."
+++
She makes muffled noises: ~chupo~ (slurp-suck)
= N* | n* n*
Approving gasp from above:
= ...a*
+++
More muffled noises:
= n* | nmu* | umu*
Fluid dynamics: ~juru juru~ (and small ~bikun~ near the base)
#28#
I don't know why, but I can't figure out the little squiggly sound effect in front of her nose. Could be anything: quivering, dripping, smooth friction (since her finger is right there), a kissy noise from her mouth, etc.
Her: ~muni munyu~ (caressing his ammo pouch)
= nee... ii?
-- "So.. is this good?"
Him:
= nn... ii... yo...
-- "Mm... yes... very good..."
+++
He has a small gasp ("a*") as she keeps going for two more frames:
~chuu~ (suction)
~chiro chiro~ (tongue-curling? quivering?)
= nfu... | ha...a...
+++
Him:
= [Kaoru]... [ho]shii ka?
[I don't know if he's asking, "Do you enjoy what you're doing right now?" or "Shall we switch back to pelvic thrusting?"]
-- "Kaoru... do you want to?"
+++
Her:
= ...n | un...
-- "...mmn | yes..."
++
bell: ~GOO...N...~
splash: ~chapo*~
Her:
= a... [Kenshin] koko-de?
-- "But... Kenshin, here in the bath?"
He kisses her shoulder: ~chu~
= n?
-- "Why not?"
Her:
= uso*
-- "We can't!"
#29#
Obviously, they can.
Her: aa*
Him: nn*
Pelvic thrust: ~ZU*~
+++
Him:
= sugoi... ippai-ni [hai]tta yo...
-- "It feels wonderful... filling you up all the way..."
bell: ~GOO...N...~
Cultural note and pun alert: it's customary in Japan to go to a temple or shrine on New Year's Day and stand in line to ring a large bell. Unlike Western bells which are suspended from a pivoting beam with a clapper pendulum swinging back and forth inside, these bells are relatively immobile and have a separate perpendicular beam/log that strikes directly into the side like a battering ram (video here). The verb for ringing a bell in this manner is [tsu]ku, as used by Kenshin on the next page-- but that verb also means "thrust against" or "pierce into".
Him: a*
Her: ~pasa~ (more splashing)
= [kane]-ga... | nee [oo-tsugomori] da 'tte-iu no-ni...
-- "That bell... | it means that it's New Year's Day now, right?"
= [atashi]tachi konna-[tokoro]-de... | aN*
-- "Shouldn't we go someplace where we can bang the bell? | aH--"
~jupo~ ~zupo~ (boinkety)
#30#
Him: ~zapa~ (kerboink)
= sore-mo sou de-gozaru na...
-- "That's true, we should celebrate the New Year..."
+++
= [kane] de-wa-nai ga... | kochira-mo [tsu]ite-iru no-ni [ka]wari nai...
-- "But instead of banging the bell... | I'd rather stay here and keep banging you..."
Her: ~afu~ (panting gasp)
= iya...n | baka* sou ja-nakute!
-- "No... | you idiot, that's not what I meant!"
~ZU*~ ~ZUPU~ (boinkboinkboink)
#31#
= aa*
Him: ~ZUPO* NUPO*~
= jaa yameru?
-- "Soooo, should I stop?"
Her:
= n*... ya... yame... naide
-- "Nh... no... please... don't stop now"
Him:
= [kimo]chi ii?
--- "Does it feel good?"
?:
= un...
[Not sure what to make of this balloon-- is he answering his own question on her behalf ("It does, doesn't it?"), volunteering his own opinion ("Yes, it feels good to me"), or complying with her previous line with weird balloon flow ("Okay, I won't stop")? The regular balloon outline definitely suggests that this is his line rather than hers, though I suppose she could be managing to say "Yes, it does feel good" in a relatively level voice before returning to the wavery balloons surrounding it.]
Her:
= ii* ii-no* | [Ken...shin...]
-- "It feels... so good-- | Ken... shin..."
Some splashing at the bottom of the panel: ~chapu~ ~chapo~
+++
Panting in small oval balloons up top: afu | HA...
Thrusting down near the bottom: ~jupo~ ~jupo~
The next few lines spill across the framebreak; I think they're mostly hers, though some of them could be his instead:
= aa... mo... ikiso...
-- "Yes... more... I'm going to come..."
= i* IKU ikuu*
= "oh GOD I'm coming--"
= itte ii yo | ...*a | an*
-- "yes, oh yes, I'm coming NOW... | ...nha | AHH--"
[Alternately, the first part of this could be him telling her, "that's good, go ahead and come now" (shrug)]
Shuddering on both sides: bikun* bikun*
Pounding/spurting farther down: doku* dopu*
#32#
bell: ~GOOO...N...~
[At this point, I have a Robert Palmer earworm: "Bang a gong, get it on" (guitar riff)]
Him:
= [sessha]tachi-no-[kata]-ga [haya]ku-[o]watta de-gozaru na ([yasu]ku-no)
- [yasu]i: easy, carefree, inexpensive... or at least that's my best guess for that tiny handwritten kanji #*@@(*@.
= our-way/method[S] quickly-finished [C] [P] (easily[noun])
[I'll have to assume that he's tacitly referring to the bell.]
-- "You see? Our way of banging was much faster than waiting in line for the bell (and more relaxing, too!)"
Her:
= ...mo [shi]ranai...
-- "...oh, I don't know about that..."
+++
Him:
= [Kaoru-dono] [senaka]-wo [naga]shite-ageru de-gozaru yo*
- [senaka]: back
-- "Kaoru-dono, let me scrub your back for you!"
Her:
= ee--*
-- "Whaaaa--?!"
+++
~gabo~ (shoving his head underwater)
= damee--*! | sonna-koto saretara HAZUKASHI--*
- saretara <- "when/then" conditional of sareru <- passive of suru (make/do): "if/when [verb] is done"
-- "Absolutely not! | that sort of thing makes me SOOOO embarrassed!!"
Him:
= (nani-de--* [imasara]* gabo)
- [imasara]: at this late time
-- "(What the-- you're protesting *now*? *blub*)"
[...I wish Kaoru wasn't acting so stupid in this story. Sigh.]
+++
bell: ~GOOO...N~
Her:
= (BAKA-- yametee* a* soko-wa...) (a*)
-- "(Idiot-- stop doing that-- oh, there...) | (ah--)"
+++
Well, at least they're moved to the futon.
= a*... [Kenshin]... | ...mou?
-- "Ah-- Kenshin... | ...jeez, *again*?"
#33#
~gu*~ nyaru (wet thrusting)
He kisses her shoulder: ~chu~
= [Shinnen]-no [hime]-hajime de-gozaru... (n?)
- [hime]-hajime: first boink (of the New Year), usually on the night of January 2 (or previously the lunar-calendar analogue?)
[Based on the next page, it isn't evening yet.]
-- "This is our first boink of the New Year..."
Her:
= [nande]-yo soree... (a... [hai]ruu...)
-- "What the heck are you talking about? (ah-- you're inside me...)"
+++
= [kekkyoku]* | o[furo]-de [futamawari]-mo shita kuse-ni | (a*) | mada [ta]rinai-no?
-- "What about-- | --the two times in the bath, and earlier? | (ah) | Don't they count?"
harder pumping: ~zoo* zoo*~
Him:
= n?
-- "Hm?"
+++
= [Kaoru]-ga [koba]meba itsu-demo yameru no-ni...
- [koba]eba <- conditional of [koba]mu (refuse, deny)
= [N][S] if-refuse whenever stop although
[Not really sure how the conditional verb fits in here, but at this point I'm just blearily coasting :b ]
-- "No, because both times you told me to stop."
~gui*~ (grab)
~puchu~ ~zunyu zunyu~ (rumpety-pumpety)
Her:
= a* a* | yaa..
+++
= (yamenai kuse-ni...)
-- "(But you *didn't* stop...)"
Various:
= *a* a* | ha | n*
#34#
Later, she makes bleary sounds from under the covers:
= n | un--- | [ima]... [itsu]?
-- "Mmh | urg-- | what... what time is it?"
Him:
= [hirusu]gi-kurai
-- "Sometime in the afternoon."
+++
Her: ~ba*~ (shock)
= uso* [doujou]!!
-- "Oh no-- what about the dojo?!"
Him:
= [kyou]-wa [Ganten] dakara [yasu]mi de-gozarou
-- "Everyone is probably taking a rest for New Year's Day."
+++
She flops down and glomps him: ~funya--~ ~kyu~
= a sokka...
-- "Oh, that's right..."
Him:
= sakki [Yahiko]tachi-no [koe]-ga shita de-gozaru
[The rest of the {Yahiko]tachi is left rather vague: Tsubame? Yuutarou (as the other assistant instructor)? Some of the students?]
-- "Though earlier, I did hear some voices from Yahiko and the others."
Her:
= e*
-- "What?!"
+++
= [shinnen]-no [aisatsu]-ni-[ki]ta n'darou ga... | (a...)
-- "They must've thought we went out to visit other people for New Year's greetings... | (ah...)"
He smooches her boobage: ~chuchu--u~
= nan-to-naku [sas]shita-no de-gozarou
- nan-to-naku: idiom for "for no apparent reason"?
-[sas]suru: guess, conclude
-- "They didn't have any reason to think that."
Her:
= e...
--- "But..."
+++
Her:
= [sas]shita 'tte KORE-wo? | e*
-- "Are you saying they guessed we were doing THIS? | argh"
Him: ~chu~ ~chu~
= [Yahiko]-wa [kekkou] [otona] de-gozaru shi na
- [kekkou]: very/rather? Can also be used to say "no thanks" or "I'm fine"?
-- "Yahiko is definitely an adult now, after all."
-- "
Her:
= anata yoku [heiki]-de
-- "You're taking this very lightly."
#35#
= [Kenshin]... | o[naka] [a]kanai-no?
-- "Kenshin... | aren't you hungry yet?"
~GON GON~ (I think this is an empty stomach growling.)
Him: ~chu~ ~chu~
= n? ...[suko]shi...
-- "Hm? ...a little bit..."
+++
= kono ato | [issho]-ni [ta]beyou...
-- "After this | we can go eat together..."
+++
Her:
= au*... mo...u DAME dattaraa...
-- "Ow-- dammit, not AGAIN..."
~nuchu~ (plunge gloop)
?:
= doushite? (SUGE [hai]tta yo...)
Her: "How can you keep doing this? (I can't believe you're inside me again)"? or
Him: "Why not? (I'm inside you already-- it's wonderful)"?
+++
Various exclamations:
= aha...| a... ii yo...
-- "Ahhh... | oh that's good..."
= ya* a* a* a* | n*h... mo... dameE
-- "St-- stoooop it | ngh... it's not... possible..."
+++
= a* | HAA
Her:
= mou... kore-de [nankai]-[me]?
-- "Jeez... how many times is this now?"
Him: ~ZU* ZU*~ thrusting
= saa...
--"Let me think..."
#36#
Her:
= mo--* [Kenshin]-ga konna-ni etchi-datta nante [shi]ranakatta--*!
-- "What the-- even YOU don't know how many times we've done it since last night?!"
Him:
= [jitsu]-wa [sessha]-mo [shi]ranakatta...
= in-fact I-also didn't-know
[see next line]
+++
= [Kaoru-dono]-no-[koto]-mo motto-[shi]ritai...
= your-stuff-too want-to-know-more
[Based on the next sentence, I think this one retains [sessha] as the subject from the previous one, but the literal "I'd rather know more about you" is rather vague, and I can't make it more specific w/o also rewording the previous line from the similarly literal "No, I don't know that either"-- and no matter what, I can't figure out how to preserve the continuous syntactic flow of the verb [shi]ru through the next few lines.]
-- "Nope-- instead of counting on my fingers | I'd rather keep fingering you."
Her:
= USO! [oku]-made [shi]tte'ru kuse-ni...
= untruth into-depths is-knowing although
-- "But that's not your *finger* inside me right now..."
+++
Him:
= [shi]ru dake ja (n)
= know up-until [P]
-- "Then should I count this time as 'one'? (mm)"
Her:
= [ta]rinai...
-- "Oh, you're hopeless."
+++
= ...[Kenshin]... kore-ja [kyou] [koshi]-ga [ta]rinai wa-yo--
-- "...Kenshin... because of this, I won't be able to walk today..."
Him:
= osechi [saku] 'tto ite yokatta de-gozaru na
- 'tto-ite <- variant of quotative "to-itte"?
-- "Then it's a good thing that you already made New Year's food for us."
Her:
= ...sono-tame-ni [tsuku]tta n'ja-nai dakedo...
-- "...That wasn't the reason I was thinking of when I made it..."
End. *floop*
Current progress: done(ish).
(Hmm. Weirdly, I seem to've shifted over to finding hi-res scans *easier* to work with than paper copies, esp. for tracking the aforementioned "refinements"... downloaded a scan set of "Saikai", but for really teeny blobs of kanji, the paper copy is the only way to go, and I really do need the handwriting practice.)
Meanwhile, I've found a scan set for the original "Hama" (Yamaguchirow's first IY/Kagome doujin), but most of the pages are only ~50kb and I may not be able to read them (esp. the handwritten bits).
Usual disclaimers: I don't really know what I'm doing, and don't want this turned into English-language scanslations. I noticed a few weeks ago that one member of lemonscented_rk is trying to sell raw RK doujinshi scans from her own blog, which is making me seriously ponder friends-locking all of these translations :b
For usual format key, check previous translations.
#9#
Splash page; title/credits in romaji.
#10#
Kaoru puts a four-tiered food box onto the table: ~kapa*~ (clunk)
Her:
= yo--shi 'tto!!
- yoshi: a supportive/jubilant exclamation
- 'tto: exaggerated form of the particle "to"
-- "...and woohoo! Yay me!"
+++
= kya--n dekita dekita--*
- dekita <- past tense of "dekiru" (able to do something)
-- "Squeee-- I did it, I really did it!"
= [Kamiya Kasshin Ryuu] osechi-[yondan] o-[Shougatsu] supesharuu!
- osechi: traditional foods for New Year's Day
- [yondan]: four layers
- supesharu: loanword from English "special"? loanwords are normally written in katakana, but this is in hiragana...
-- "Kamiya Kasshin Ryuu special New Year's four-tray feast!"
~ji--n~ (overjoyed)
[Don't eat that, Kenshin-- remember Kyouken 5.1? Well, I guess he wouldn't, since that was actually written after Saikai...]
+++
She hugs the food box lovingly: ~hishi*~
= [Kenshin]-ga [rusuchuu]-no kono-[suushuukan]...
= [N][S] during-absence[noun] these-several-weeks
= [Tae]-san-no-[tokoro]-ni [kayo]i[zu]mete [tokkun] shite-[mora]tta [seika]-ga [ima]! koko-ni!!
- [tokoro]: "place"; seems to be a more more common pronunciation of this kanji than [toko]
= to-[N]+'s-place frequently-visiting special-training did-for-me results[S] now! in-here!!
= ([kekkyoku] [hanbun-igai]-[ue] [Tae]-san-ga [tsuku]tta yo--na-mon' da-kedo)
= after-all more-than-about-half [N]+[S] prepared as-if-thing is[C] however
-- "While Kenshin's been away for the past few weeks, I've been frequently visiting Tae-san's place so she could give me special cooking lessons, and this is the result now! In this box!"
-- "(even though in the end, Tae-san was the one who actually prepared more than half of this)"
+++
She softly thumps her chin down onto the box lid: ~hata!~
= ...HONTO-ni [kyou] [kae]tte-kuru wa-yo ne...
- [kyou}: "today"; more informal pronunciation than [konnichi] for the same kanji pair
= really today coming-back-home [mM] [P]
-- "He really is coming home again today, I hope..."
+++
= [nennai]-ni-wa [kae]ru 'tte [i]tte'ta mon' ne...
= within-the-year[T] return-home ["] was-saying thing [P]
-- "'I'll come back before the end of the year'-- that's what he kept telling me, right?"
= [kyou]-wa [oo-miso](ootsugomori) nan da shi...
- [oo-miso]: (kanji) New Year
- oo-tsugomori: (furigana) last day of the year
- shi: a conjunction for adding clauses (vs. individual words)
= today[T] New-Year('s eve) what [C] and
-- "And now that it's New Year's Eve..."
#11#
heavy door rattling in its tracks: ~GATA GATA~
She sighs/yawns: ~ha--*~
+++
= ha... | [atashi] 'ttara [nani] [kitai]-shite'ru n'darou...
- 'ttara <- to-ittara <- "when/then" conditional of [i]u (speak, say)
= [sigh] | I [mM] what is-hoping/expecting [fM]probably-is[C]
= [betsu]-ni [oo-miso]-ga... [kotoshi] [kagi]ri 'tte WAKE-mo nai no-ni...
- betsu-ni: (with negative verb) particularly (via double negative from "not different"?)
- particularly New-Year[S]... this-year up-to ["/mM?] also-REASON not[iX] although
[Slightly remixing both lines]
= "(sigh) | That really is my wish for the New Year... | ...even if he can't come home by this year's end..."
+++
= [Kenshin]-ga [buji]-ni [kae]tte-kite-kuretara...
= [N][S] safely when-coming-home-for-me
-- "As long as Kenshin comes back safely to me..."
= sore-de ii ga ja-nai...
-- "nothing else really matters..."
+++
= ...o[furo] [sa]mechatta ka mo
- [sa]meru: become cold
-- "I suppose the bath is completely cold by now."
= [oida]ki shi to kou kara
= reheating-bath and/doing? this-way from
-- "So I'd better go reheat it."
#12#
The bath is inside, but the fireplace underneath it is built into the outside wall of the building.
She pokes the fire: ~PACHI PACHI~ (crackle crackle)
= ...demo | yappari [haya]ku [kae]tte-kite [ho]shii...
= but | as-expected quickly coming-home desireable
[Remix]
-- "...but I still wish | that he'd come home quickly, as I'd expected."
+++
= a... DAME DAME | konna n'ja ii [oku]-san ni-narenai zo!!
- [oku]: literally "inside/inmost"; with the added personal honorific -san, a term for "wife"
- narenai <-? neg. of nareru <- potential of naru (become): can't become?
= [X] [negatives] | this-way [P] good wife can't-become [mM]
-- "No, I shouldn't... | I can't become a good wife if I think that way!!"
She goes back inside, rattling the door shut again: ~KARA*~
And he's already inside, starting to unwrap a cloak or other overgarment.
#13#
She yeeps with surprised delight, or delighted surprise: wa--*
Him:
= sonna-[fuu]-ni [odoro]kanakute mo...
- [odoro]kanakute <- -te form of [odoro]kanai <- neg. of [odoro]ku (be surprised/frightened): "not surprised/frightened"
[The -nakute-mo construction seems to be a sort of nonrestrictive indication, chopped down from longer phrases such as "-nakute mo ii" ("it's okay if you don't [verb], but you can if you want to"). Supposedly the -te forms aren't supposed to be sentence-final, and if they appear to be, should have a verb or copula reconstructed afterward: "-te kudasai" ("please [verb]"; "-nakute mo ii desu").]
= in-that-manner not-surprising also...
-- "You don't have to be *that* surprised..."
Her:
= datte datte datte
[Lots of slightly different meanings for "datte", even in its single(?) identity as a sort of compound particle thing. I think I'm undercaffeinated at the moment because my brain feels like sludge :b ]
= "But, I thought, because--"
+++
~daki*~ (glompage)
[Actually a grammatical verb form from "daku" (embrace) rather than pure onomatopoeia]
= o-kaeri-nasa--i! | otto
-- "Welcome home-- | husband!!"
Looks like they really are formally married now.
+++
Him:
= tadaima...
-- "I've come back home..."
= [rusuchu] [nanigoto]-mo-nakatta de-gozaru ka...?
- [nanigoto]: something; [nanigoto]-mo: anything/nothing (depending on pos/neg verb); [nanigoto]-mo-naku: peacefully
= during-absence nothing-happened [C] [Q]
[Flipping neg. syntax]
-- "Did everything go well while I was away...?"
+++
Her:
= (a) | un! [Kenshin] koso [kega] to-ka nai?
- koso: "indeed/precisely" etc.; emphasizes the previous clause/noun
- [kega]: injury
- to-ka: "stuff like", "such as" etc.; vaguer form of quotative/indicative particle "to"
-- "(ah) | Yes-- what about you, Kenshin? You didn't get hurt or anything like that, did you?"
Him:
= aa
[In Japanese, after a negative statement/question, an affirmative reply confirms the previous negative ("Yes, you're right, I didn't get hurt") unlike normal English usage which would refute the negative ("Yes, I did get hurt").]
-- "No, I'm fine."
#14#
Her:
= yokatta | anata-ga [buji]-de nani-yori
- [buji]: peace/safety (lit'ly ~"no stuff")
- nani-yori: "anything/nothing" (depending on verb polarity); lit'ly "than/from-what/which"
-- "That's good | I'm so glad that you're safe."
+++
Him:
= sono-[kao]-ga [mi]takatta | e...
- [mi]takatta <- past of [mi]tai <- desid. of {mi]ru (see): "wanted to see"
-- "That's the face I've been longing to see | yes..."
Keep that sentence in mind. He repeats it in a few pages.
+++
Smooching commences.
= n*
= n...
= *ha... ...n*
She clutches his sleeve: ~gyuu*~
= nn--*
#15#
Heavy breathing intensifies.
(top panel first:)
= nha* | HAA HAA...
= n* n... nmu*
+++
She sinks away from him:
= HAA | ...a [Ken]shiin...
~kakun~ (along her back: "wobble/tremble")
Him:
= oro | [chikara]-[nu]keta de-gozaru ka?
- [chikaranu]ke: disappointment, discouragement; however, no examples found with forms of "iru" immediately afterward.
- [chikara]-[nu]keru: disappoint, discourage
[I think he's indirectly apologizing for his late return; otherwise, if he were asking "Are you too tired to do anything right now?" I think the verb would be in the past tense-- and he seems perfectly willing to override complaints of fatigue later on.]
[Almost complete rephrase :b ]
-- "Oro | were you becoming very lonely without me?"
+++
= kore-wa?
-- "What's this?"
Her:
= a... osechi [tsuku]tta n'da kedo...
-- "Ah... it's some New Year's food that I prepared..."
Him:
= sore-wa sugoi!
-- "That's amazing!"
#16#
He moves the food box from the table to the floor: ~TO*~ (thump)
= jaa kore-wa [ashita]-no [tano]shimi [to]tte-oite...
- [to]tte-oite <- 'te form of [to]tte-oku (set aside, keep for later) <- [to]ru (take, lift, get)
-- "Well, let's set it aside for now and enjoy it tomorrow..."
+++
Kaoru gets to sit on the table instead.
Her:
= a* | ima]-wa kotchi-ga [ta]betai...
-- "Ah-- | But I want us to eat it here and now..."
+++
He tips her onto her back, slides a hand up her kimono, and spreads her legs: ~ba*~ (thump)
= cho* | [Kenshin]*
-- "Wait-- | Kenshin--"
+++
= u...so*
[See next lines]
~DOKI*~ (heartbeat)
+++
Hakama-removal speed record!
~guri guri*~ (preliminary rubbing against her)
= sonna... | [kyuu]-ni*...
- [kyuu]-na: quick, hasty (nounlike adjective)
-- "I can't believe... | you're doing this... | so quickly!"
#17#
~guri*~ (more rubbing; setting up for entry)
Small gasp from him: ...*
Larger one from her: a*
+++
Large thrusting motions: ~gugu~ ~guryi~
Small ~gyuu~ (tight fit)
= i* ya* SUGE--ni [i]recha... | aN... [ita]*
- suge--ni: from "sugoi" (amazing), or from "sugu ni" (immediately)? the latter makes more sense in this context...
- [i]recha <- [i]rete-wa <- [i]reru (insert/allow A into B as external agent)
-- "Don't-- plunge it in-- all at once... | ow... it hurts--"
+++
Him: (w/ continuing ~gu* gu* gu*~ and small panting breath "HAA...")
= daijoubu.. | jiki-ni...
- jiki-ni: immediately, directly
-- "It'll be fine... | in a moment..."
+++
= hora... [hai]tta...
- [hai]ru: enter, fit-into
-- "see... I'm all the way in now..."
Full pelvic impact: ~zuo~
Squishier thrusting: ~gunyu~ ~gunyu nyu~
+++
Definitely lubricating now: ~nuru*~
= a*
#18#
He presses her hand against the center of action: ~nuru--~
= ne... koko... | mou [nu]rete-kite'ru
-- "And... feel here... | you're starting to become very juicy"
Her:
= iya*... [i]wanaide*
-- "Yeep... please don't say that"
(or possibly "don't talk that way"?)
+++
Force vector and flow rate both increasing: ~ju* zupo*~
= a* | nn*
+++
= a* | dame*... n*... [kan]jite...-kitaa...
-- "Ah | No, don't... it's started... to feel..."
+++
Him: ~ZU* ZUPU*~
= sono-[kao]-mo... | [mi]takatta..
-- "I've been longing to see... | that face, too..."
[Line repeated from a few pages ago.]
#19# has sound effects all over the place, in roughly diagonal layers :b
More pumping near the top: ~ZUPU~ ~NUPU~
Kaoru: a*nFU | haaFU
Table rocking: ~GATA*~ ~GATA*~
Her again: yaa* a* | aa*
#20#
Panting afterward on the floor:
= HAA... | HAA
+++
Her:
= mou* [kae]tte-kuru-nari...
- nari: a form of the copula I've never seen before... how the heck is this used?
-- "Sheesh-- did it have to be the moment you came home...?"
Him:
= datte [shikata]-nai de-gozarou
-- "But I couldn't help it"
+++
= [Kaoru-dono]-no-[kao]-wo [mi]ru-to | tsui [ho]shiku-naru...
-- "As soon as I saw your face | I suddenly wanted you, right away..."
+++
Her:
= sore 'tte [atashi]-no-sei-ni shite'ru?
= that ["/mM] to-my-fault is-doing
-- "So you're saying it was my fault?"
Him:
= sou sou...
-- "That's right..."
#21#
Her:
= nee... | [Kenshin]... o[naka] [a]ite-nai no?
-- "Say... | Kenshin... aren't you hungry?"
Him:
= iya | sore-yori [furo]-ni [hae]ritai
-- "Not really | I'd rather go take a bath..."
+++
= [issho]-ni
-- "...together with you."
+++
Kamiya Fist o' Pain: ~bago--~
= iya
-- "No way!"
+++
= IYA IYA--*
-- "No, NO!!!"
= (datte [mae]-kara [kira]tte [i]tte'ru desho-- HAZUKASHII-kara damee--)
= [P] from-before disliking is-saying probably[C] from-embarrassing pointless
[The verb forms in the first clause are confusing me :b ]
-- "(Because I've always been telling you that I don't like to do that-- it's just too EMBARRASSING, I don't want to--)"
+++
He suddenly hoists her over his shoulder: ~hyoi~ (ambush)
= [kyou]-wa [kyoukou]
- [kyoukou]: enforcement
-- "Well, today, you'll have to!"
Her?:
= dozo--*
[??? Normally, "douzo" is used to mean "go ahead" or "come this way" etc., but the jagged balloon outline suggests that this is her line, and she doesn't look cooperative at all.]
-- "You're going to carry me off like *this*?!"
+++
= (a...n [koshi]-ni-[chikara]-ga [hai]ranai)
- [koshi]: hip, pelvis, loins; Google translates 腰に力 as "hip force", and 腰に力が入った as "came back to power"...? Dang idioms :b
[Argh-- I really need to remember that the kanji for that verb is almost always read as [hai]ru when used by itself, instead of in compounds.]
...I have to guess that she's complaining that her pelvic region is already feeling wobbly/painful from the table boink, but I really don't know how to express that. "Darn you-- now it hurts to stand up!"? "Don't put me back down-- my legs still feel like jelly and I can't walk by mmyself yet!"? Urg.
#22#
Big splash: ~zaba--*~
Tiny handwritten caption under panel, pointing toward Kaoru:
= [kekkyou] [nu]ga[?]nta
[Can't figure out that one kana toward the end-- possibilities include "mi", "mu", "zu", "o", "se"... "se" makes the most sense, as part of the verb [nu]gaseru (make someone undress), but I can't work out how the following syllables fit into any of these, and the last kana is definitely "ta" rather than "da".]
- [nu]gasu <- alternate form of [nu]gaseru?
Bleargh. I give up on trying to strictly parse this, since the general meaning is pretty clear from the kanji and context: "She finally took her clothes off" or slight variations such as "He finally persuaded her to take her clothes off" etc.
According to normal bath logistics, the splash was probably the rinse water from Kaoru pouring buckets of cold water over her body as she washed in the next room, rather than Kenshin doing a cannonball jump into the tub of hot water.
+++
Him:
= [kaze-hi]ku de-gozaru yo-- | (kotchi muite'ru kara)
-- "You're going to catch a cold-- | (so you should turn around and come over here)"
+++
She slides the wooden door shut to close off the tub room: ~GATAGATA~ (rattle/roll)
Her:
= mou... [kyou]-dake nan-dakara ne...
= [X]... only-today what-because [P]
-- "Oh, fine... but I'm only going to do this for today, okay?"
~chapo*~ (small splash as she dips her foot into the water)
#23#
He makes a grab for her arm and pulls her over:
~gui*~ (clutch)
~zaba~ (larger splash)
Her:
= aN
+++
Another ~zaba~ splash.
Her:
= ke* [Kenshin]... o-[yu]-ga*
-- "Ke-- Kenshin... but we're in the tub!"
Normally, nothing goes into the tub except for clean bodies. Extra fluids may well present some difficult logistics for tub cleanup afterward.
Him:
= ii kara...
-- "It's okay..."
+++
= chanto [kata]-made [?]katte
[The last kanji is the root of several verbs, none of which seems to fit the -katte suffix? [tsu]keru (dip in, self-soak?), [hita]su (soak/dip/drench something else?), [hita]ru (be soaked/drenched)? The variant *[tsu]kasu doesn't seem to exist, nor does the kanji seem to exist as a single freestanding noun, though it's pronounced [shin]- in various compounds.]
[Bah. I'm going to proceed as if the verb [tsu]kasu is real-- maybe it is, maybe it isn't.]
= neatly up-to-shoulder soaking
-- "Just settle into the water, up to your shoulders."
Her:
= a... un...
-- "Um... okay..."
+++
Underwater "splash" as he pulls her into his lap: ~chapon~
She is justifiably suspicious.
= --demo nanka sugo--ku H-na [taisei] de [hae]tte-nai?
- [taisei]: posture
-- "But aren't you arranging us into an amazingly naughty position?"
Him:
= kou shinai to [futari] [issho]-ni [hai]renu de-gozaru yo
- [hai]renu <- alt. for [hai]renai <- neg. of [hai]reru (can enter/hold)
= this-way not-do and two-people together can't-enter [C] [mM]
-- "Why not sit this way? Aren't we a married couple, after all?"
Her:
= so... sou?
-- "I... guess so."
#24#
Glomp: ~gyuu*~
Her:
= sou ieba [Yahiko]-wa?
-- "By the way, how is Yahiko?"
Him:
= [hara]-ga-[he]tta 'tte | [Aka]beko-ni [choukou] de-gozaru na
- [choukou]: nonstop
-- "He said he was really hungry, so he went directly to the Akabeko."
+++
Boobage-fondling: ~monya~
= [Tsubame]-chan-ga [mokukki]-mo kuse-ni (kusu)
-- "But it was because of Tsubame, too (chuckle)"
= [Yahiko]-mo [otoko] de-gozaru na
[By itself, [otoko] is more brusque/informal ("guy", "male") than the usual phrase [otoko]-no-hito for "man"]
-- "After all, Yahiko is a man too, isn't he..."
Her:
= aN KORA
-- "(gasp) Hey, stop that--"
+++
~GOOO...N~ (a isolated sound from a large bell)
someone:
= a
+++
~jaba*~ (splash as he stands up in the tub)
Her:
= [Joya]-no [kane] da wa...
-- "That's the New Year's bell..."
Him:
= mou sonna [jikan] de-gozaru ka
- [jikan]: time
-- "It is around that time, isn't it?"
#25#
Her:
= a*
~zaba*~ (splash)
+++
Her:
= aan iya* | yada* {Kenshin]*
-- "Hey, don't-- | Kenshin, stop it!"
[Yeah, I'll be interpolating a lot of the dialogue on this page.]
Him:
= iya?
-- "Stop what?"
Her:
= a...a...
+++
Her:
= soko-wa*
-- "Stop... touching me there--"
= a* m | haa
Suctiony sounds: ~chu chu kuchu~
[.daed si lauP]
+++
?:
= ii...n
[For some reason, I keep wanting to read this line as him saying, "But it feels good, doesn't it?" even though the balloon outlines suggest that it's her saying "It feels good."]
Her: ~pikun~ (tremor, near her face)
= aa*
Him: ~guchu guchu~ (finger suction from below)
= [kan]jiru? (sugoi [oto]-shite'ru)
-- "How does that feel? (You're making some amazing sounds.)"
+++
Her:
= datte... sakki shita pakari-de [binkan]-na no...
- pakari: opening?
- [binkan]-na: sensitive
= [P]... recently before from-opening sensitive [P]
-- "That's because... I'm still sensitive from being opened up a few minutes ago..."
Him: ~nuru~ (slippery fingers)
= koko-mo?
-- "Inside here, too?"
#26#
Some panting in small ovals over her shoulders: ~HAA~ ~HAA~
Her:
= iya* iyaan* | soko-mo* a* a...n*
-- "No, don't-- | not there, too... nh--
~hiku hiku~ (tremors, over her knees)
~kuri~ (finger-curling)
~gopu puju~ (wet plunging)
+++
~puchu puju~ (more of the same)
~pota pota~ (dripping underneath)
Her:
= a * | dame dame [de]chau*
- [de]chau <- [de]te-shimau <- [de]ru (exit, depart): "finally/regrettably exit" ; the -te form of [da]su (alt. pronunciation of the same kanji) would be [da]shite.
...this may be another piece of untranslatable wordplay, since the verb [de]ru is sometimes used for male orgasm. So she may be saying, "Take your fingers out of me already!", but she may also be saying, "Hurry up and ejaculate into me!" Or both at the same time.
The only "translation" I can think of requires completely ditching/reversing the literal words involved :b
-- "Ah-- | stop that, just put it into me now!"
+++
He stops, looking confused:
= e*
-- "...huh?"
Him:
= [Kenshin]-no... ARE...
[She's using a delicate euphemism for his bits; "are" (that thing) is a relative pronoun that's parallel to "sore" and "kore".]
-- "You know, your... thing."
He's still confused.
= ...nande?
-- "...what thing?"
+++
Her:
= datte... | [Kenshin]-no [aka]-chan [haya]ku [ho]shii n'da mon'
- [aka]-chan: baby (literally "cute little red thing/person")
-- "Um, you see... | I really want you to make me pregnant soon, and so..."
#27#
I don't think he's fully recharged yet, though:
= so... | sonna-[koto] nara...
-- "If... | if that's what you want right now, then..."
+++
Bell ringing again: ~GOO...N~
Glompage: ~gyugyu--~
?:
= [shimpai]-sezu to mo-ikura-demo...
- ikura: how much/many?
- ikura-demo: any amount, as much as you want
- mo ikura-demo: any amount more
-- "Don't worry, we can do it as many more times as you want..."
+++
Him?:
= HORA | motto [o]kiku]-shite...
-- "Here-- | make me larger..."
Her:
= un...
-- "Okay..."
+++
She makes muffled noises: ~chupo~ (slurp-suck)
= N* | n* n*
Approving gasp from above:
= ...a*
+++
More muffled noises:
= n* | nmu* | umu*
Fluid dynamics: ~juru juru~ (and small ~bikun~ near the base)
#28#
I don't know why, but I can't figure out the little squiggly sound effect in front of her nose. Could be anything: quivering, dripping, smooth friction (since her finger is right there), a kissy noise from her mouth, etc.
Her: ~muni munyu~ (caressing his ammo pouch)
= nee... ii?
-- "So.. is this good?"
Him:
= nn... ii... yo...
-- "Mm... yes... very good..."
+++
He has a small gasp ("a*") as she keeps going for two more frames:
~chuu~ (suction)
~chiro chiro~ (tongue-curling? quivering?)
= nfu... | ha...a...
+++
Him:
= [Kaoru]... [ho]shii ka?
[I don't know if he's asking, "Do you enjoy what you're doing right now?" or "Shall we switch back to pelvic thrusting?"]
-- "Kaoru... do you want to?"
+++
Her:
= ...n | un...
-- "...mmn | yes..."
++
bell: ~GOO...N...~
splash: ~chapo*~
Her:
= a... [Kenshin] koko-de?
-- "But... Kenshin, here in the bath?"
He kisses her shoulder: ~chu~
= n?
-- "Why not?"
Her:
= uso*
-- "We can't!"
#29#
Obviously, they can.
Her: aa*
Him: nn*
Pelvic thrust: ~ZU*~
+++
Him:
= sugoi... ippai-ni [hai]tta yo...
-- "It feels wonderful... filling you up all the way..."
bell: ~GOO...N...~
Cultural note and pun alert: it's customary in Japan to go to a temple or shrine on New Year's Day and stand in line to ring a large bell. Unlike Western bells which are suspended from a pivoting beam with a clapper pendulum swinging back and forth inside, these bells are relatively immobile and have a separate perpendicular beam/log that strikes directly into the side like a battering ram (video here). The verb for ringing a bell in this manner is [tsu]ku, as used by Kenshin on the next page-- but that verb also means "thrust against" or "pierce into".
Him: a*
Her: ~pasa~ (more splashing)
= [kane]-ga... | nee [oo-tsugomori] da 'tte-iu no-ni...
-- "That bell... | it means that it's New Year's Day now, right?"
= [atashi]tachi konna-[tokoro]-de... | aN*
-- "Shouldn't we go someplace where we can bang the bell? | aH--"
~jupo~ ~zupo~ (boinkety)
#30#
Him: ~zapa~ (kerboink)
= sore-mo sou de-gozaru na...
-- "That's true, we should celebrate the New Year..."
+++
= [kane] de-wa-nai ga... | kochira-mo [tsu]ite-iru no-ni [ka]wari nai...
-- "But instead of banging the bell... | I'd rather stay here and keep banging you..."
Her: ~afu~ (panting gasp)
= iya...n | baka* sou ja-nakute!
-- "No... | you idiot, that's not what I meant!"
~ZU*~ ~ZUPU~ (boinkboinkboink)
#31#
= aa*
Him: ~ZUPO* NUPO*~
= jaa yameru?
-- "Soooo, should I stop?"
Her:
= n*... ya... yame... naide
-- "Nh... no... please... don't stop now"
Him:
= [kimo]chi ii?
--- "Does it feel good?"
?:
= un...
[Not sure what to make of this balloon-- is he answering his own question on her behalf ("It does, doesn't it?"), volunteering his own opinion ("Yes, it feels good to me"), or complying with her previous line with weird balloon flow ("Okay, I won't stop")? The regular balloon outline definitely suggests that this is his line rather than hers, though I suppose she could be managing to say "Yes, it does feel good" in a relatively level voice before returning to the wavery balloons surrounding it.]
Her:
= ii* ii-no* | [Ken...shin...]
-- "It feels... so good-- | Ken... shin..."
Some splashing at the bottom of the panel: ~chapu~ ~chapo~
+++
Panting in small oval balloons up top: afu | HA...
Thrusting down near the bottom: ~jupo~ ~jupo~
The next few lines spill across the framebreak; I think they're mostly hers, though some of them could be his instead:
= aa... mo... ikiso...
-- "Yes... more... I'm going to come..."
= i* IKU ikuu*
= "oh GOD I'm coming--"
= itte ii yo | ...*a | an*
-- "yes, oh yes, I'm coming NOW... | ...nha | AHH--"
[Alternately, the first part of this could be him telling her, "that's good, go ahead and come now" (shrug)]
Shuddering on both sides: bikun* bikun*
Pounding/spurting farther down: doku* dopu*
#32#
bell: ~GOOO...N...~
[At this point, I have a Robert Palmer earworm: "Bang a gong, get it on" (guitar riff)]
Him:
= [sessha]tachi-no-[kata]-ga [haya]ku-[o]watta de-gozaru na ([yasu]ku-no)
- [yasu]i: easy, carefree, inexpensive... or at least that's my best guess for that tiny handwritten kanji #*@@(*@.
= our-way/method[S] quickly-finished [C] [P] (easily[noun])
[I'll have to assume that he's tacitly referring to the bell.]
-- "You see? Our way of banging was much faster than waiting in line for the bell (and more relaxing, too!)"
Her:
= ...mo [shi]ranai...
-- "...oh, I don't know about that..."
+++
Him:
= [Kaoru-dono] [senaka]-wo [naga]shite-ageru de-gozaru yo*
- [senaka]: back
-- "Kaoru-dono, let me scrub your back for you!"
Her:
= ee--*
-- "Whaaaa--?!"
+++
~gabo~ (shoving his head underwater)
= damee--*! | sonna-koto saretara HAZUKASHI--*
- saretara <- "when/then" conditional of sareru <- passive of suru (make/do): "if/when [verb] is done"
-- "Absolutely not! | that sort of thing makes me SOOOO embarrassed!!"
Him:
= (nani-de--* [imasara]* gabo)
- [imasara]: at this late time
-- "(What the-- you're protesting *now*? *blub*)"
[...I wish Kaoru wasn't acting so stupid in this story. Sigh.]
+++
bell: ~GOOO...N~
Her:
= (BAKA-- yametee* a* soko-wa...) (a*)
-- "(Idiot-- stop doing that-- oh, there...) | (ah--)"
+++
Well, at least they're moved to the futon.
= a*... [Kenshin]... | ...mou?
-- "Ah-- Kenshin... | ...jeez, *again*?"
#33#
~gu*~ nyaru (wet thrusting)
He kisses her shoulder: ~chu~
= [Shinnen]-no [hime]-hajime de-gozaru... (n?)
- [hime]-hajime: first boink (of the New Year), usually on the night of January 2 (or previously the lunar-calendar analogue?)
[Based on the next page, it isn't evening yet.]
-- "This is our first boink of the New Year..."
Her:
= [nande]-yo soree... (a... [hai]ruu...)
-- "What the heck are you talking about? (ah-- you're inside me...)"
+++
= [kekkyoku]* | o[furo]-de [futamawari]-mo shita kuse-ni | (a*) | mada [ta]rinai-no?
-- "What about-- | --the two times in the bath, and earlier? | (ah) | Don't they count?"
harder pumping: ~zoo* zoo*~
Him:
= n?
-- "Hm?"
+++
= [Kaoru]-ga [koba]meba itsu-demo yameru no-ni...
- [koba]eba <- conditional of [koba]mu (refuse, deny)
= [N][S] if-refuse whenever stop although
[Not really sure how the conditional verb fits in here, but at this point I'm just blearily coasting :b ]
-- "No, because both times you told me to stop."
~gui*~ (grab)
~puchu~ ~zunyu zunyu~ (rumpety-pumpety)
Her:
= a* a* | yaa..
+++
= (yamenai kuse-ni...)
-- "(But you *didn't* stop...)"
Various:
= *a* a* | ha | n*
#34#
Later, she makes bleary sounds from under the covers:
= n | un--- | [ima]... [itsu]?
-- "Mmh | urg-- | what... what time is it?"
Him:
= [hirusu]gi-kurai
-- "Sometime in the afternoon."
+++
Her: ~ba*~ (shock)
= uso* [doujou]!!
-- "Oh no-- what about the dojo?!"
Him:
= [kyou]-wa [Ganten] dakara [yasu]mi de-gozarou
-- "Everyone is probably taking a rest for New Year's Day."
+++
She flops down and glomps him: ~funya--~ ~kyu~
= a sokka...
-- "Oh, that's right..."
Him:
= sakki [Yahiko]tachi-no [koe]-ga shita de-gozaru
[The rest of the {Yahiko]tachi is left rather vague: Tsubame? Yuutarou (as the other assistant instructor)? Some of the students?]
-- "Though earlier, I did hear some voices from Yahiko and the others."
Her:
= e*
-- "What?!"
+++
= [shinnen]-no [aisatsu]-ni-[ki]ta n'darou ga... | (a...)
-- "They must've thought we went out to visit other people for New Year's greetings... | (ah...)"
He smooches her boobage: ~chuchu--u~
= nan-to-naku [sas]shita-no de-gozarou
- nan-to-naku: idiom for "for no apparent reason"?
-[sas]suru: guess, conclude
-- "They didn't have any reason to think that."
Her:
= e...
--- "But..."
+++
Her:
= [sas]shita 'tte KORE-wo? | e*
-- "Are you saying they guessed we were doing THIS? | argh"
Him: ~chu~ ~chu~
= [Yahiko]-wa [kekkou] [otona] de-gozaru shi na
- [kekkou]: very/rather? Can also be used to say "no thanks" or "I'm fine"?
-- "Yahiko is definitely an adult now, after all."
-- "
Her:
= anata yoku [heiki]-de
-- "You're taking this very lightly."
#35#
= [Kenshin]... | o[naka] [a]kanai-no?
-- "Kenshin... | aren't you hungry yet?"
~GON GON~ (I think this is an empty stomach growling.)
Him: ~chu~ ~chu~
= n? ...[suko]shi...
-- "Hm? ...a little bit..."
+++
= kono ato | [issho]-ni [ta]beyou...
-- "After this | we can go eat together..."
+++
Her:
= au*... mo...u DAME dattaraa...
-- "Ow-- dammit, not AGAIN..."
~nuchu~ (plunge gloop)
?:
= doushite? (SUGE [hai]tta yo...)
Her: "How can you keep doing this? (I can't believe you're inside me again)"? or
Him: "Why not? (I'm inside you already-- it's wonderful)"?
+++
Various exclamations:
= aha...| a... ii yo...
-- "Ahhh... | oh that's good..."
= ya* a* a* a* | n*h... mo... dameE
-- "St-- stoooop it | ngh... it's not... possible..."
+++
= a* | HAA
Her:
= mou... kore-de [nankai]-[me]?
-- "Jeez... how many times is this now?"
Him: ~ZU* ZU*~ thrusting
= saa...
--"Let me think..."
#36#
Her:
= mo--* [Kenshin]-ga konna-ni etchi-datta nante [shi]ranakatta--*!
-- "What the-- even YOU don't know how many times we've done it since last night?!"
Him:
= [jitsu]-wa [sessha]-mo [shi]ranakatta...
= in-fact I-also didn't-know
[see next line]
+++
= [Kaoru-dono]-no-[koto]-mo motto-[shi]ritai...
= your-stuff-too want-to-know-more
[Based on the next sentence, I think this one retains [sessha] as the subject from the previous one, but the literal "I'd rather know more about you" is rather vague, and I can't make it more specific w/o also rewording the previous line from the similarly literal "No, I don't know that either"-- and no matter what, I can't figure out how to preserve the continuous syntactic flow of the verb [shi]ru through the next few lines.]
-- "Nope-- instead of counting on my fingers | I'd rather keep fingering you."
Her:
= USO! [oku]-made [shi]tte'ru kuse-ni...
= untruth into-depths is-knowing although
-- "But that's not your *finger* inside me right now..."
+++
Him:
= [shi]ru dake ja (n)
= know up-until [P]
-- "Then should I count this time as 'one'? (mm)"
Her:
= [ta]rinai...
-- "Oh, you're hopeless."
+++
= ...[Kenshin]... kore-ja [kyou] [koshi]-ga [ta]rinai wa-yo--
-- "...Kenshin... because of this, I won't be able to walk today..."
Him:
= osechi [saku] 'tto ite yokatta de-gozaru na
- 'tto-ite <- variant of quotative "to-itte"?
-- "Then it's a good thing that you already made New Year's food for us."
Her:
= ...sono-tame-ni [tsuku]tta n'ja-nai dakedo...
-- "...That wasn't the reason I was thinking of when I made it..."
End. *floop*
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on 2008-07-27 01:51 am (UTC)Trying to think of another quick project... "Hama 2" was fun enough that I would've liked to try the original "Hama", but with the one scan-set I could find for that, some of the pages (esp. w/ handwritten dialogue) are just too small.
And then there's the weird little Sesshoumaru/Rin story at the end of "Hama 2", but... it is rather weird ^_^; (and also has blurry handwritten dialogue in a few places :b )