"Together..." (Aitou XX)

[wombat1138]

Starting a new entry for the actual transcription/translation. Although the kanji-based title on the front cover should technically be "[Aitou] XX", it's written out on the back cover as "Aito Double X". The transcription went much, much faster than usual, whether because this doujinshi was from another miraculously clear print run or because I've updated my contact lenses or some combination of both.

Usual disclaimer: I have no idea what I'm doing, except for juggling a lot of reference books and web lookups. Please do not convert these into English-language scanslations, or I will be cross.

Format key--

Frame/balloon order is from right to left and from top to bottom. The kana for "tsu" is sometimes used to indicate a glottal stop, as in a sudden gasp or an abrupt break in speech; in those cases, I'll transcribe it as "*" instead.

Narrative descriptions
= raw romaji: [kanji], hiragana, KATAKANA, words-linked-inna-phrase, (handwritten marginalia), ~sound fx~
(Every so often, I splat down a comparison from wot-club's IY translations, which indicate kanji with CAPS instead of [brackets].)
- expanded transcription: grammatical contractions unpacked from the raw transcription if necessary (e.g., "inna" <- "in a") or other analysis
= raw gloss: [word function]*, literal-translation
*functional abbreviations: [T]opic, emphatic [S]ubject, [O]bject, unidentified [P]article, [C]opula, [Q]uestion; [mM] (emotional emphasis), [fM] (factual emphasis), [aX] (animate existence), [iX] (inanimate existence), ["] (quotation), [rQ] (rhetorical question)
[snarky notes]
-- "occasional coherent(ish) translations"

Pagination: #N#
Framebreaks: +++ (sometimes I leave these out if nothing much happens in each frame)
Balloonbreaks: | (if I compress several short balloons into the same line of text; otherwise, I just start a new line for each balloon. Usually.)


#11#

~KARA~ (the window screen rattling open; "whish")

Kaoru gazes out through the window at the iconic Touji pagoda. They're at an inn somewhere in Kyoto, probably during chapter 251 of the manga in the aftermath of Jinchuu.

~GOOO...N~ (a strong wind blowing through the bamboo; "fwoooosh")

Behind her, Kenshin rests his sakabatou against the wall (~CHIKA*~, "thunk"?). His arms and chest are bandaged, and his right arm is in a sling.

Kaoru:
= [hontou]-ni | [futari]-de [ki]chatta n'da ne... | [Kyouto]...
- "kichatta" <- "kite shimatta" <- past tense of "[ki]te shimau" (from irregular verb "[ku]ru" (come/arrive)): "finally arrived"
- "futari": two people, a paired couple
- "n'da" <- "no da" (emotional emphasis + copula)
[Both of the kanji in "Kyouto" (usually spelled "Kyoto" in English-language references) mean "capital city", courtesy of the Department of Redundancy Department.]
= truly | as-a-couple finally-arrived [mM][C] [rQ] | Kyoto
[Moved all of the parts around.]
-- "So... | we've finally reached Kyoto, haven't we? | Together..."

~KASA~ ("rustle")

#12-13#

Title pages in romaji.

= together... | by shinji yamaguchi

#14#

Kenshin:
= aa...
[informal "yes", weakly asserting/confirming the speaker's state of mind]
-- "Yeah, I guess so..."

He rests his hand over hers on the screen (~su~), making her heart thump: ~doki~

+++

But she pulls her hand away (~ba~) and starts babbling:
= [konnichi]-wa [aoiya]-ni [to]maru n'da to-[omo]tte'ta...
[The name of the Oniwabanshuu's inn, the Aoiya, literally means "Hollyhock House". The formal crest of the Tokugawa shoguns was a stylized set of hollyhock leaves.]
- "omotte'ta" <- "omotte ita" <- past tense of "omotte iru" <- present progressive of "[omo]u" (think): "was thinking" or "had been thinking"
- "X to omou": expresses intention to do X
= today[T] in-Aoiya stay-overnight [mM][C] was-planning-to...
-- "I'd planned for us to stay at the Aoiya tonight..."

+++

= e...to | kore-kara... dou shi yo 'kka?
- "shi": open-ended "and"; sometimes means "therefore"
- "'kka": variant of "'kke" or "ka"? Obviously some sort of question-marker, though.
= [pause-filler] | from-here... why/how and/therefore [mM] [Q]?
[She's dubious that they can finish travelling all the way to the Aoiya before nightfall, I think.]
-- "But... | I don't think we can get that far."

+++

= [kekkou] [aru]keta shi [Kenshin] mo [tsuka]reta n'ja-nai?
- "aruketa" <- past tense of "arukeru" <- potential form of "[aru]ku" (walk): was able to walk, could have walked
- "tsukareta" <- past tense of "[tsuka]reru" (get tired): "got tired"
- "n'ja nai" <- negative of "n'da" <- "no da"
= enough could-have-walked and/therefore [name] also became-tired [mM]-isn't[C]?
-- "We've walked as much as we can today-- you're tired too, right?"

= ...[yuuhan]... a* o[furo]? ...demo [Kenshin]-wa [muri] dakara o-[yu] [mora]tte--
- "dakara" = "da kara" ([C]-from): therefore, for that reason
- "moratte" <- "[mora]u" (receive, personally benefit from)
= evening-meal... [bath]? ... but [name][T] impossible therefore hot-water receiving
-- "Do you want some supper... or a bath? ...but you can't manage that; I'll ask them to bring hot water--"


s#15#

He glomps her from behind, tenderly at first (~gyu~) then more insistently (~gyu...n~).

Her:
= a... | [ken]...shi...n

Him:
= [da]kitai...
- desiderative of "[da]ku" (hold/embrace)
-- "I just want to hold you..."

A shiver of anticipation runs through her (~biku*~), resulting in a tiny moanlet ("a...")

#16#

But she backs away from him anyway.

Her:
= [dame]... | sonna [shintai] de...
= futile | that-way body from...
-- "Don't... | not in your condition..."

+++

= made [kizu] mo [nao]tte-nai no-ni... [muri]-shite [Kyouto]-ni [ki]te'ru-no yo...
- "naotte" <- -te form of "[nao]ru" (heal by itself) or "[nao]su" (help something else to heal)
- "kite'ru" <- "kite iru"
- "muri shite" <- -te form of "muri suru" (overexert)
= until wound also not-healing although... overexerting in-Kyoto is-coming[N] [mM]...
-- "Not until your wounds have healed more... you're already worn out from coming to Kyoto..."

+++

Him:
= [Kaoru-dono]-wa [naniyue] [Kyouto]-ni [ki]ta no de-gozaru ka?
= [name+title][T] why/how in-Kyoto came [mM] [C] [Q]?
[Don't feel like coming up with anything special for "Kaoru-dono" and "de gozaru" this time.]
-- "Why did you decide to come here with me?"

Her:
= e*?
-- "Huh?"

+++

= [naniyue] 'tte [Tomoe]-san-no o[hakemai]ri-ni...
- "hakemairi": a visit to someone's grave
= why/how ["] [name]'s to-grave-visit
-- "Why? To visit Tomoe's grave with you..."

Him:
= sore dake?
-- "Is that all?"

+++

Her:
= sorya... [Kenshin]-no [kega] mo [shinpai] datta kara...
- "sorya" <- "sore wa": ~"That's true" or "of course"?
= [confirmation]... [name]'s injury also concern was[C] from...
-- "Well... of course I was worried about your injuries, too..."

Him:
= sore dake?
-- "Is that all?"

+++

He's been leaning closer to her again, edging toward a kiss, but she reluctantly holds him off again. (~gui~)

Her:
= dakara...
-- "And so..."

#17#

= dakara... | anata-no... [kawa]-ni [i]takatta kara
- "itakatta" <- past tense of "itai" <- desiderative of animate-existence "[i]ru": "wanted to be"
= therefore... | your... beside wanted-to-be[aX] from
-- "And so... | I... wanted to stay beside you."

She blushes at her own admission and lets him kiss her after all. ("n*...")

+++

Weakly, she protests when he turns up the intensity.
= [dame]
-- "No, don't--"

Him:
= doushite?
-- "Why not?"

+++

The kissing continues (~kuchu~), muffling her objections ("nmu*...")

+++

More kissing (~chuku~), plus the beginnings of heavy breathing:
~ha... | *a... | ha...

#18#

They're still standing by the window. There's a little ~su*...~ sound above her which is either a soft gasp or her head slowly tipping back toward the blinds (~to*, "tok"?).

Some random moans: ~haa | n*~

Him:
= motto... | ...[kawa]-ni...
[Loosened for the sake of idiom.]
-- "So come closer... | ...beside me..."

Her:
= de... mo
-- "But..."

+++

She sways on the verge of swooning (~GATA*~) and moans again ("a*") as he slides her kimono off one shoulder (~gui~).

Him:
= demo?
-- "But what?"

+++

Her knees crumple, landing her on the window seat as he wraps his tongue around the exposed nipple (~pero~) while still clutching the cloth against the side of her breast (~ku*~).

Her: ~a~
= dakara...
[See next line.]

+++

= [kizu]-ga [nao]ru made... ...[ma]tte...
= wound[S] heal until... ...wait!...
[Combined with previous panel and reshuffled.]
-- "Your wounds... | you should wait until they heal..."

Him:
= [ma]tenai
- "matenai" <- negative of "materu" <- potential of "[ma]tsu" (wait): "can't wait"
-- "I can't wait that long."

#19#

Despite what he just said, he stops, leaning his head against her bosom as he kneels by her feet.

= [tashi]kametai n'da...
- "tashikametai" <- desid. of "[tashi]kameru" (confirm/verify?): "want to confirm"?
-- "I just want to make sure..."
[Is he uncertain about her devotion to him, or about his own physical limitations? Or both?]

+++

They glomp each other for a moment: ~gyu...~

+++

Based on the angle of this panel, she's slid off the window seat and is now kneeling on the floor beside him, looking up into his face.

= sore-ja... | [atashi]-ga [Kenshin]-ni... shite-ageru kara... | dakara... ne...
- "sore ja" <- "sore de wa", roughly equivalent to "so then"/"in that case"?
- "shite ageru": the speaker does a favor for someone else
= ~therefore(?)... | I[S] for-[name]... do-for-you because... | therefore... [rQ]
[Reshuffled.]
-- "Then I-- | in that case, let me... help you with that... | ...okay?"

+++

They've rotated their positions now, and are both sitting on the floor. His back is against the base of the window seat/ledge thing, and she's untying his hakama: ~SHURU | SHURU~

Him:
= [Kaoru... dono]

+++

She gives him a first, delicate lick: ~pichu~

He twitches: ~bikun~

+++

Him:
= N...

Since she's already anointed him with saliva, she distributes it more evenly with her hand (~nyuru~) with a small muffled sound of her own: "n"

#20#

All his equipment seems to be in working order so far. Starting from his main sound-effect and working counterclockwise:
= a* | haa | n* | ha...a

From there, I think the remaining sound-effects are hers; ~jupu~ is probably a "watery" noise related to Oop-Ack's "jururu" (drool), "chapu" (drops of water plunking down) and "shapu" (a more substantial splash). The rest are fairly straightforward: two ~kuchu~ squishy/slurpy noises, a little moan ("n"), a large kissy/suction noise (~chu~), and Kaoru, don't talk with your mouth full ("mu...nn").

+++

The inset panel on the left has more smoochy/slurpy noises (~chu... | juru*~) with a bit of panting/moaning ("n-- | haa...")

+++

As he starts to get used to the idea, he sneaks his left hand behind her and slides up the bottom of her kimono: ~susu*~

There are still some moans:
= a...| haa

And random noises: ~kuchu~ (slurp) | ~pichu~ (lick)

+++

With a firm grip on her naked butt (~gui*~), he hauls himself down/sideways into position #69, surprising her.

= [Kenshin]* jaa...
[Very loosely:]
-- "Hey, what're you--"

#21#

Him: ~kuchu ju | ju...~ (slurp smooch smooch)

Her: ~bikun~ (jolt!)
= un | n* n* | nnn (moaning)

+++

He slathers some of her juices around with his fingers, awkwardly left-handed: ~nuru~

Her:
= soko-wa dameE!
-- "Stop it, over there!"

+++

Does he stop? Of course not.
~nutchu | tchu chu | puchu puchu~
[Aggressive slathering, plus some suction noises from his fingers going in and out]

He has an oddly analytical expression, at least on the visible portion of his face.
= koko-wa mou [ho]shigatte'ru yo
- [ho]shigaru: desire/covet
= here[T] already is-wanting [mM]
[For some reason, I'm wibbling about several different interpretations. But I think that if he were speculating about her state of mind, he'd have to use a different verb form, so it's not "From here, it looks like you already want me".]
-- "This is exactly where I want to be"? or maybe fudging the tense to "I've been longing to touch you here again"?

Her:
= ann | yaaa...

+++

Still her: ~doki~ (heartbeat)
= datte...
-- "But..."


#22#

Obediently, he moves away and sits up again (his hair is hanging down toward his chin, rather than back behind him).
= oide...
[This is based on "oide ni naru", an honorific version of "iku" (go) or "kuru" (arrive), so strictly speaking it should translate as "Come here". However, his face looks more like "Please, I need you."]

+++

As he leans against the window base again, she carefully wades astride him on her knees.

Her:
= [Kenshin]... | ...amari [ugo]kanaide ne...
- "ugokanaide" <- polite negative command form of [ugo]ku (move): "please don't move"
-- "Kenshin... | ...please don't move too much, okay?"

Him:
= n...
[Looks too calm to be a moan; condensed down from the informal affirmative "un"? See the next line.]

+++

Him:
= [deki]ru dake ne...
- dekiru: able to do something
[The phrase "dekiru dake" is usually followed by an adverb and another verb, e.g. "dekiru dake hayaku suru" (do something as fast as possible); here, I think the overall structure is flipped and this phrase belongs to Kaoru's previous line. However, the balloon for that had a very wiggly, tense outline and this one is smooth and calm, which probably indicates that Kenshin is speaking.]
-- "All right... | I'll try to keep as still as I can."

[Yeek. This must be like torture for him.]

She reaches for an anchorhold: ~kuchu~

+++

And slowly settles down onto him. There are moans ("a | aaaa"), plus some squishy sounds down below (~nu* nu* | nururu~).

Her:
= ha... [hai]tcha...u...u
- "haitchau" <- "haitte shimau" <- "[hai]ru" (enter): "finally/completely entering"
-- "Y-- you're inside me... nowww..."

#23#

As she leans slightly backward with some minor panting ("haa | haa*") and squishing (~nyu* | nyu* | chu*~ "nuru"), he reaches up to her bare breasts again, even extending his right arm out from its sling with a grabby/tweaky noise (~kyuto*~).

Her:
= ya | aN | [migite]... [tsuka]tcha [dame]...
- "tsukatcha" <- "tsukatte wa" <- "[tsuka]u" (use); in this case, the "-te wa" pattern indicates a conditional clause with a negative outcome: "if you use it, bad things will happen."
= [noises] | right-hand shouldn't-use futile
-- "Hey | ahH | don't use... your bad arm..."

Him:
= n | [suko]shi dake de-gozaru yo
= [informal yes?] | small-amount until [C] [mM]
-- "But... | it's not that much movement."

+++

He tweaks out one of her nipples (~kui*~) and pops it into his mouth (~chiru*~). She moans: "a*"

+++

While he continues suckling (~ju* ju* | chu chu~), the fingers of his right hand remain active on her other side (~kui kui~).

Her:
= haaN | n... ya... [Kenshin]...
-- "AhhhNH | yeah... but... Kenshin..."

+++

He continues slurping: ~zu* zu*~

Her panting gets louder: ~HAA | HAA~
= anmari... [chikubi]... [tsuyo]ku*... [su]wana...ide...
-- "D-- don't suck on... my nipple... so hard...

= ka... [kan]jite [chikara]-ga-[nu]kechau kara yo...
- "chikara ga nuku": lit. "strength extracts away", id. for "get weak" or "lose strength"
-- "It's making me feel w-- woozy..."

#24#

She collapses partially backward in a shock of woozles (~bikun~) and random panting/moaning which I'm skipping this time.

+++

Him:
= [kimo]chi ii?
-- "Did that feel good?"

Her:
= un... ii yo... | [Kenshin]-wa?
-- "Yeah... it did... | but what about you?"

[Since there are no verbs to nail the tense down, both lines might also be the ongoing present "Does this feel good?" etc.]

+++

Poor oro-chan looks almost apologetic that he isn't getting very much out of staying still.
= [sugo]i yo | [hae]tte'ru TOKO [sawa]tte...
- [sawa]ru: touch/feel
= amazing [mM] | is-entering place touching/feeling
-- "It's always... | wonderful just to be inside you."

+++

She reaches down to check how he's doing:
~zuru*~ (suction from partial withdrawal)
~nuru--*~ (lots of liquid slathering down)

Not sure who the next line belongs to; the balloon outline is a bit wavery, but so was his first line in the previous panel:
= [nemoto] made... konna-ni... [kata]i yo...
= root/base until... in-this-way... firm/solid [mM]
Him? -- "It makes me... feel hard... all the way down..."
Her? -- "But... you haven't come yet... have you?"

+++

She examines her slathery hand with a hard heart-thump of apprehension: ~TOKIN~
= ...kore... | [atashi]-no?
-- "Is this... | just from me?"

+++

Right. He's had it with this not-moving crap. He lunges forward (~FU*~) and smooches her...
= n*
-- "Mmh--"

#25#

...then dumps her onto her back as he sits up with a right-handed grip on her knee, reaching out from his sling again: ~gui~

Her:
= ya* | [Kenshin]* [mucha]-shinaide
- "mucha shinaide" <- polite neg. command of "mucha suru" (overexert): "please don't overexert"
-- "Hey! | Kenshin, you'll hurt yourself!"

+++

He has an expression of grim determination in this panel which somehow makes me wobbly.

= jitto shite'ro to-[i]u [kata]-ga | [mucha]-na [hanashi] de-gozaru yo
- "shite'ro" <- "shite iro" <- command form of "shite iru" (is doing): "keep doing"?
= patiently/continually keep-doing! ["] method[S] | reckless/absurd conversation [C] [mM]
-- "You keep telling me that. | I'm tired of hearing such nonsense."

+++

From this point, he starts hauling her legs around, gradually rotating her onto her side and then onto her face. Some of the intermediate stages resemble poses I've mostly only seen in shunga (naughty woodcut prints), with one of her knees braced up against his torso as he leans down into her.

~ju*~ (squish)
~su...E~ (the "e" is in hiragana, but has an emphatic dot beside it; maybe sudden movement after a slow, smooth lead-up?)
~zumu*~ (behind his back; an upward jerk of motion? either him rising farther up or pulling her right knee up to her shoulder, I think)

Her:
= DAME* | yaa (an) [kan]jichau... neE
- "kanjichau" <- "kanjite shimau": finished feeling
-- "You CAN'T-- | hey, (ah!) I... already came..."

Him: (his whole face is dark with effort/arousal)
= [kan]jite...
-- "Then do it again..."

#26#

Her:
= n* | (yaaa...) [hage]shiku inaide*
- "hageshiku" <- adverb from "[hage]shii" (violent)
- "inaide" <- polite neg. command of either "iru" (animate existence) or "iku" (go): "please don't be" or "please don't go"?
-- "Nh-- | (whee!) please, not so hard!"

~zupu* zupu*~ (pumping)
~biku biku~ (little nerve-shocks of impact)

+++

= ...onaka... no [oku] made... ippai de... [Kenshin]...
[Hmm... Kodansha only lists "onaka" as "stomach", but perhaps the usage spreads out to "belly" in a more general sense?]
- "ippai": fully, to the limits of capacity
-- "...You're going... all the way... up inside me... Kenshin..."

+++

~zuku zuku~ (vigorous pumping)

IMHO she's wailing too much ("a* | a* a*") to be capable of words right now, so this line must be his:
= sokoo...
-- "Right there..."

+++

~gu* gu*~ (rumpety-pumpety, pressing her flat down to the floor)

Her:
= *hia | aa* (gasping loud moans)

Him:
= haa hi* | a* [Kaoru] | [Kaoru]* | ka-o-ru* | han*

#27#

She has a loud moan here that's written out as "aku*", which I'm guessing is more of a choked cry than a summons for Saitou to show up for some Soku Zan: "aak--"?

Similarly, Kenshin's "*u" is probably a broken grunt: "--unh"?

~DOKU* DOPU*~ (pound, splurt)

+++

As they lie there panting ("ha-- | ha-- | ha--"), his right arm starts to bleed through its bandages.

+++

He pulls her with him into spooning together on their sides (~gyu~), weakly saying her name again: "Ka-o-ru..."

She sees his freshly bloodied bandage but doesn't do anything about it for now. She'll give him hell about it on the next page, though.

#28#

Fashion note: this is one of the few times I can think of when we get to see Kaoru in her kimono-type underwear. Her outer kimono has been taken off somewhere, so now she's just wearing her hadajuban (a white top with a colored collar and sleeves; it fastens with a cloth tape tied around her waist) and susoyoke (wrapped half-slip; it looks slightly lighter than her collar/sleeves). According to some historical claims, the susuyoke was usually dyed red to camouflage menstrual stains, though there are disputing beliefs tha regular menstruation was relatively uncommon in the past, due to nutritional factors. Tomoe's susuyoke looked white back in "A Distant Thunder", though.

Her: (over a pile of unwrapped bloody bandages)
= mo--* | [shin]jirannai**!!
- "shinjirannai" <- "shinjirarenai"? <- neg. of either "shinjirareru" (passive form) or "shinjireru" (potential form) <- "[shin]jiru" (trust, believe): "is not trusted" or "can't trust"?
-- "Jeez--! | I can't believe you!!"

+++

She's indignantly wrapping him back up in fresh bandages.
= konna-ni natte [ita]kunakatta no!?
- "itakunakatta" <- past tense of "itakunai" <- neg. of "[ita]i" (painful): "didn't hurt"
= in-this-way becoming didn't-hurt [P]
[Wiggly for the sake of idiom.]
-- "Saying you wouldn't get hurt-- look at this!"

Him:
= kono kurai [heiki] de-gozaru yo
= this approximately serenity [C] [mM]
-- "It's not that bad, really!"

= ([bakumatsu]-no [koro]-ni kurabereba...)
- "kurebereba" <- conditional of "kureberu" (compare): "if compared"
= bakumatsu's in-time if-compared
[The Bakumatsu was the revolution that toppled the Tokugawa shoguns from power and restored the emperor to the political fulcrum, at least nominally. Of the two kanji that make up the word, the first one comes from "[baku][fu]" ("tent government", referring to the shoguns' original role as military commanders in the field). The second one usually has a different pronunciation in the words "[ima]da" and "[ma]da", both of which have a general cluster of temporal-limit meanings like "so far, until now, yet". I have an annoying tendency to produce the casual misspelling "Bakamatsu", which I suppose would be the struggle to remove a bunch of idiots from power.]
-- "(Compared to what happened during the Bakumatsu...)"

+++

Her:
= ([atashi]-wa [Kenshin]-no [shintai]-ga [shimpai] de)
= me[T] [name]'s body[S] concern [P] being[C]
-- "(Why do I have to be the one worrying about *your* body?!)"

Him:
= (suman de-gozaru mou [nao]ru made [mucha]-shinai kara)
- "suman" <- "sumanai" (a simple apology) <- plain negative of "sumasu" (complete, finish, suffice)
- "mucha shinai" <- neg. of "mucha suru" (overexert)
= sorry [C] already/soon heal until not-overexert because
-- "(Honest, I'm sorry; I won't push myself anymore until I'm healed.)"

Teeny kanji written underneath the panel:
= [heiki] [heiki]
[Double repetition of the same pair of "serenity" kanji as a few lines ago; this Ranma fan script translates the repeated phrase as "No problem", rather than my other guess of "calm down".]

+++

Her:
= [atashi]-wa [Kenshin]-no [kizu]-wo [akka]-saseru [tame]-ni [Kyouto] made [ki]ta n'ja-nai n'dakara ne*
- "saseru" <- causative of irregular verb "suru" (do): cause to do
- "akka suru": worsen, aggravate
- "kita" <- past of irreg. vb. "kuru" (come, arrive): came, arrived
= me[T] [name]'s wound[O] make-worse for-the-sake-of Kyoto until came [mM]-not[C] [mM]-therefore [rQ]
[Chunking pieces together: "as for me, for the sake of making your wounds worse, came to Kyoto, not therefore, right?"]
-- "If I'd known that you were going to make yourself worse, I never would've come to Kyoto with you."

= (hai mou [yasu]mu*!)
-- "(Now get some rest!)"

She splats him flat onto the futon.

Him:
= hai hai
-- "Yes, ma'am."

+++

Her: .....

Him: ...n?

#29#

Her:
= ne... | [atashi]-no [ki]ite mo ii?
- "kiite" <- "[ki]ku" (ask)
-- "Um... | is it okay if I ask you something?"

Him: ~shuru~ (stretching one arm beneath his pillow)
= [nani]?
-- "What is it?"

+++

Her:
= [Kenshin]-wa... doushite [atashi]-to [Kyouto]-ni [ki]ta no?
= [name][T]... why and-me to-Kyoto came [P]
-- "Why did *you* decide to come to Kyoto with *me*?"

+++

I can only describe his look as "serene mischief".

Him:
= [haya]ku [futari]-kiri ni-naritakatta kara de-gozaru yo...
- kiri: end? mist?
- "naritakatta" <- past tense of "naritai" <- desid. of "naru" (become): "wanted to become"
[The entire phrase "futari kiri ni naru" is glossed in a Futaba-kun fan translation as "a couple breaking up".]
= quickly wanted-to-break-up from [C] [mM]
-- "Because I wanted us to break up quickly...."

[Oops-- a separate scanslation at fakku.net reveals an error in my previous attempt; on further enquiry (4.e.), -kiri turns out to be a limiting suffix, "[...] most commonly used to express the situation of two people being alone together."]
= quickly only-us-two-together wanted-to-become from [C] [mM]
-- "Because I wanted to be alone with you as soon as possible."

#30#

She is flooded with a blush of shame for yelling at him: ~kaa...~

+++

= [hontou]-ni | [atashi] de ii no?
[Hesitating between the fairly literal "Really? | Am I okay?" and the much looser "Are you... | are you really upset with me?"]
[still loosely paraphrasing]
-- "Alone... | ...with me? Really?"

#31#

He sits up for a moment and glomps her back down with him: ~gui~

= [Kaoru-dono] to | [issho]-ni [i]tai...
- "issho ni" is a tighter sort of togetherness than "futari de"; instead of just "as a couple", it's "as a single unit".
-- "Kaoru-dono | I want to stay together with you..."

#32#

Her:
= un | ...un
-- "Okay | ...I will."

[Page 33 looks like one long afterword. Nope. Not going near it for now, not even to taunt it with pointy sticks. Oh sure, it's printed rather than handwritten, but... no. Just no.]

Comments

[qadgop.livejournal.com]

Y'know, the thought of a bleeding translation is more than a little disturbing, in a fear-the-apocalypse kind of way.

[(Anonymous)]

*Crying*
I wish I'd have scans...

[(Anonymous)]

I LOVE this doujin. And finally, FINALLY you've made it possible for me to understand more of what they're saying. . . thank you, thank you, thank you. . . !

[wombat1138.livejournal.com]

...um, you're welcome?

I have no idea who you are; would you like to introduce yourself? (If not, then, well, not.)

introduction

[(Anonymous)]

*waves* Hello! Sorry, I've been lurking. I'm not really anonymous, I'm just not very LiveJournal literate. (I don't know how many anonymous people comment? They're not all me, really.)
Anyway, I love Yamaguchirow doujinshi too! She's wonderful, I have a few. . . I have very feebly tried to translate some for myself but always get way too overwhelmed by the kanji, and it's really hard to make sense of a story when you only have the hiragana and katakana to go on (*some* of the kanji are easier to remember than others, and that helps, but. . .). I am always so impressed with your translations, and they're wonderfully useful because you provide helpful and entertaining notes as well; they're so easy to read.
So, thank you!
Oh, and I live in the Bay Area too! ^__^
- Kit

Howdy.

[wombat1138.livejournal.com]

I'm pretty sure I know who the two other main anonymous commenters are, which is why I was wondering... anyway, pleased to be of (dubious?) service with my translation attempts; I'm cringing at the thought of going back through the main story from "Shinsei" because my older work probably has even larger error margins. Guess I'll have to patch up the missing page(s) at some point, though. ZOMGWTFWJD.

I still don't remember most of the kanji involved, though a few of them have been gradually sinking in-- the extra step of transcribing all of the kanji/kana does seem to help with that. Translating naughty doujinshi certainly results in an... interesting set of vocabulary, though. @_@x;

oh yatta!

[(Anonymous)]

hhm,, another RK yamaguchirow translation!

katajikenai, wombat-chan!

wow, chotto matte.... about the whole "i want us to break up quickly." that one was a joke right? i was wondering why kenshin would say something like that... i concluded that he was just teasing kaoru. ^^

well, he did say that he wants to stay together with kaoru. ^^

kenkao forever!

Re: oh yatta!

[wombat1138.livejournal.com]

Mmmyeah, there's a bunch of them (http://wombat1138.livejournal.com/tag/translations).

Kenshin does have a very odd sense of humor sometimes, at least via Yamaguchirow; cf. "Himura" and "Kuusou Gendai".

"i want us to break up quickly."

[wombat1138.livejournal.com]

...and it looks like I totally messed up that particular line on p29; I've gone back and fixed it now :b